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Post by davekersey on Nov 13, 2013 15:22:21 GMT -5
I need help developing a segment of the book I'm writing. I don't know police talk. Need help establishing the right codes, vernacular, shortcuts in communication. If you can help me out, reply here and I'll email you the segment I've written that involves the police. Thanks. EDIT: I've cut and paste one of the segments and put it as a reply below. Please give it a read and see if it needs tweaking....would be much appreciated.
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Post by davekersey on Nov 13, 2013 15:24:41 GMT -5
“Prednisone is used for many different ailments, and is so widely used, we’re not going to get much from it,” said Sheriff Marion Sims, St. Johns County, Florida to his day force. And we are not sure who it belongs to but we do know it didn’t belong to the victim or store owner. The store was only open for an hour when the homicide occurred, which probably happened just after we received the alarm signal. There were no sales tickets punched in that hour, and the pill was not there at the store close on Saturday according to the store owner who was the last one out. There is a good chance the pill belonged to the perpetrator. We couldn’t get a print from the pill, so it’s not much use to us, other than the perp may have an illness of some sort. The coroner strongly believes the perp is right handed because of the depth of the cut on the vic’s neck being deeper on her left side. We have no idea if the killer was on foot or used a vehicle, but the desk clerk at the Suites operation across the street from the scene said there was a white four door sedan, make unverified, in the motel parking lot, occupied by a man alone for about an hour and the vehicle faced the crime scene for the entire hour, then crossed A1A to park in the strip center at approximately fourteen hundred. The clerk wasn’t close enough to make the license plate. Cousins was the first on the scene and passed a white car on 206 that was westbound, twenty over the limit, twelve minutes after the alarm. Cousins isn’t sure about the make of the car. The store owner believes the killer got two hundred and fifty dollars, the starting bank for store operations, and since no sales tickets were punched. The bills are unmarked. The Palm Beach victim had the same kind of signature mark, the cross, in the same location on the torso as our victim, and death occurred by asphyxiation in both cases because of a fatal laceration to the windpipe. The coroner down there also believes the infliction came from a right handed person because the vertical part of the cross had a right handed bias. Both counties have interviewed family members of each victim. There is no known association other than both victims may have known each other from military service. We’re still checking on if their lines may have crossed at some point in time during their service careers. So, here’s what we have: the pill potentially indicating an illness of some type; a white four door sedan as a potential; a man as a potential; a knife as the weapon; a right handed perpetrator as a potential; a killer using a signature; and two similar slayings reported that are 220 miles apart. A state profiler believes the two victims were targeted and not at random. She also believes he will not stop with the two due to the signature which is an effort to make a statement, and believes if there is a next that it will be outside of Florida, but she warned me she could have that wrong. I have notified other jurisdictions. And there may be some sort of military connection, or an anti-military vendetta. We should think in terms that we’re looking for a serial killer. So go with that and keep your eyes open.”
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